When the sun of my
words goes down
I do not see a path
for my words
other than silence!
words goes down
I do not see a path
for my words
other than silence!
While my eyes
every day eager,
after your aroma,
and you no longer you
While my hurt wings
screams out the longings
and nostalgic to you,
without making a voice!
every day eager,
after your aroma,
and you no longer you
While my hurt wings
screams out the longings
and nostalgic to you,
without making a voice!
Almost tearing up
thousands of questions
Why did I fall
in Love, and what
have I gained
to you?
thousands of questions
Why did I fall
in Love, and what
have I gained
to you?
Do you think that
you betrayed me
and forgot all
our old promises
you betrayed me
and forgot all
our old promises
you might forgot
and sold.
and sold.
Or that your heart
may have found another
Just like what I've been told!
may have found another
Just like what I've been told!
--
© 2010
...When the sun of my
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...I like these lines...felt.
Love the line 'when the sun of my words goes down'... very powerful words.
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Dear S Sharp
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very heart felt. emotive. the structure worked well to enforce the language. good job!
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Thanks for the lovely contribution.
great emotional piece, exuding frustration....
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Yes, I think as others have said, that opening lines expresses so much feeling . . .
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