tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3771887317808033764.post6774053407853207177..comments2023-09-20T15:42:23.458+02:00Comments on - Shadiatique -: MartyrShadiatiquehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14081852070984670290noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3771887317808033764.post-58895382509024811712010-10-25T17:17:53.572+02:002010-10-25T17:17:53.572+02:00Hi, there!
Saw Your profile on twitter. I'm a...Hi, there!<br /><br />Saw Your profile on twitter. I'm a published latvian poet (not trying to be arrogant, just the factthat I know a thing or two about poetry). Moments of Happiness is a great poem. Just a few tips. on this and other poems.<br /><br />first of all lose the 3-dots. It doesn't help. it doesn't add any seriousness. They're pointless, basically. They're like a huge neon sign - my poem is serious! :) it is. No one needs the thoughtful dots. <br /><br />Secondly, try to organize Your verses - There must be a point, why one presses enter to divide a sentence. Poem is a poem not a text, which looks like a poem. Remember there is only one rule - everything must be with a reason. <br /><br />Last of all try to spread out on metaphors. I see, that You have a great vocabulary, and You've read a lot and experienced a lot. That is a blessing, I tell You.<br /><br />so if any questions write - u.zirnis@gmail.com<br /><br />good luck!<br /><br />Ulvis, LatviaSad_discohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09155176250607456018noreply@blogger.com